If feedback is love - here's love for you. I just spent time I should have spent in my bed sleeping reading this instead. I'll pay for it tomorrow...
I love your story, especially how you've mixed the storytelling with snippets of everyones headspaces. So in character and so amusing. Also the slow pace makes your story very satisfying and believable.
Thank you so much for sharing this! ♥ ♥ ♥